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Tips for Writing a Cookbook—Make Recipe Intros Tasty

September 15, 2010 By Nancy Baggett 10 Comments

Drizzling icing over a cake.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I’m not the first cookbook author (and won’t be the last) to insist that action verbs like drizzle, stir, spoon, flip, pipe, chop, toss and nap are important when you’re writing about food. Such verbs can invigorate and power sentences forward in a way that the descriptors called adjectives and adverbs never can. Verbs are the key to powerful prose (whether culinary or not) because they clarify and capture the action taking place.

Marbling a cookie.

But  any how-to on writing about food or writing a cookbook has to talk about descriptive words including adjectives and adverbs, too. These are especially important in what cookbook editors call recipe “headnotes,” those appetite-whetting introductory sentences found at the beginning of almost all cookbook recipes (they’re usually required by contracts) today. After all, headnotes are mainly designed to enticingly describe a dish to readers, and adjectives and adverbs are the parts of speech specifically designed to provide extra information and help readers visualize things. (If I sound English “teacherish,” you may want to check out my Ms Grammar Lady’s Writing Tips!)

Let’s take a look at two headnotes: Both have good, active verbs all right. But they also serve up a whole feast of adjectives and adverbs that I think contribute a great deal to the prose. The first sample is from my Kneadlessly Simple cookbook, the second is from Baking—From My Home to Yours, by my colleague and friend, Dorie Greenspan.

“Puffy, and crusty, and faintly tangy, this big, craggy-topped loaf is such good eating it may become a standard in your repertoire. Since the dough is baked in a Dutch oven, it usually springs up a lot and is light and airy….”

“It’s hard to imagine, but this sorbet offers the same satisfaction as its richer sibling, ice cream, does. It has all the same creaminess, the satiny, melt-in-your-mouth pleasure and the full, no-holds-barred taste, yet it has no eggs or cream….”

 I think you’ll agree that the abundance of descriptors, like puffy, craggy-topped, and satiny in these sentences not only doesn’t detract, but they paint a vivid, enticing picture. They help give a clear idea of the finished dish, and spare the reader from having to wade through the ingredients and instructions to envision it—which is what effective headnotes are supposed to do.

The key is to choose fresh, specific and thoughtfully selected adjectives and adverbs, not the generic “delicious,” and “mouthwatering,” that are too vague and too often used. Noted Houghton-Mifflin cookbook editor, Rux Martin, liked to remind me and her other authors that, “Remember, you only get one “delicious,” per book!” And she wasn’t kidding! My cookbook author friend, David Lebovitz (who wrote The Perfect Scoop) adds that if you’re writing about chilled or frozen concoctions, another word you must avoid overusing is “refreshing.” Be prepared to say how the dish is refreshing.

Napping ice cream with maple sundae sauce.

So, the take away here is not to avoid adjectives and adverbs when rummaging in your wordsmith’s toolbox, but to chose and use them creatively and with enormous care. Tip: Try to focus very hard on exactly what it is that appeals about the dish as an aid to coming up with really meaningful descriptors.  These will make it much easier to effectively describe food.

Here are two more sample recipe intros, to show you how deadly the effect of just grabbing the first very general culinary adjectives that come to mind and automatically sticking them in here and there.

This apple crisp is quite mouthwatering and delicious and makes a great dessert.

Just scrumptious for dessert, this apple crisp is a dish everyone will love.

Do these intros makes your mouth water? Probably not, even though, ironically, they actually tell you the crisp is mouthwatering and scrumptious! In both fiction and nonfiction, straight out telling often isn’t the most effective way to go.These sentences are boring and predictable, plus they provide readers no real information other than that the crisp is a dessert, which they already know! The second example does get a couple points for not falling back on the “This is” construction, which is also grossly overused in recipe intros. To see how I really introduced my apple crisp, check out the recipe below.

If you’re a blogger and used to depending on photos to describe a dish, remember that only words can convey how it smells, or whether it’s tart or sweet, or if it crunches appealingly with every bite. This truth is especially important to keep in mind if you aspire to write a cookbook: In most cookbooks the majority of recipes aren’t pictured (too expensive); it’s your prose alone that makes them come alive. (For some of my more general dos and don’ts of writing headnotes go here. )

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Apple Crisp

Full of cinnamon and brown sugar fragrance and the robust taste of peak-of-season fruit, this homespun, nubby-topped crisp celebrates one of autumn’s most abundant and widely appreciated gifts—the apple. Actually, the dessert spotlights the wonderful variety of apples available now by calling for and combining several different kinds.

At the very least, incorporate two types, say, bracing Stayman and juicy-sweet Honey Crisp. But tossing in three or four kinds will round and deepen the apple flavor, lending lovely sweet, tart, mellow, and bold notes all at once.
1/3 cup packed brown sugar
2 1/2 tablespoons all-purpose white flour
1/2 teaspoon ground cinnamon
7 1/2 cups peeled, cored and coarsely sliced tart cooking apples, including at least 3 kinds, such as Stayman, Rome, Granny Smith, Honey Crisp, Golden Delicious, Jonathan, or York
1 tablespoon fresh lemon juice
Topping
3/4 cups all-purpose unbleached white flour
2/3 cup rolled oats
2/3 cup packed light brown sugar
1/4 cup unsalted butter, melted
1/4 cup corn oil, canola oil, or other flavorless vegetable oil

Preheat oven to 350 degrees F. Coat a 7- by 11-inch (or similar 2-quart) flat rectangular baking dish with nonstick spray. In a large bowl, stir together, sugar, flour and cinnamon until blended. Stir in apples and lemon juice. Spread mixture in baking dish.

Bake in middle third of oven for 25 minutes, stirring once or twice. Meanwhile, in a medium bowl, briefly mix flour, oats and brown sugar. Add melted butter and oil, stirring until incorporated. Sprinkle the topping evenly over apples. Press down lightly. Return to oven. Bake until well browned and bubbly, 25 to 30 minutes longer. Transfer to wire rack. Let cool to warm before serving. Serve with ice cream, if desired.

Makes 6 or 7 servings.

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  1. Nancy Baggett says

    February 2, 2011 at 12:54 am

    You're very welcome. Writing is both art and craft, and just working at it pays dividends. Glad to hear you are happy with your progress.

  2. sarah says

    January 29, 2011 at 7:34 am

    I've been learning a lot recently about food writing through Dianne Jacob's book and from both your blogs. Thanks for the detailed advice and illuminating examples about recipe headnotes. I have discovered that cooking the food and even photographing it is easier than writing about it effectively. But learning how to improve has been thrilling lately. Thanks!

  3. Nancy Baggett says

    September 23, 2010 at 3:34 am

    I agreee that they are really hard to write. I find I can't leave them all till the end of a project–I am worn out after doing only one or two a day.

  4. Mark Scarbrough says

    September 23, 2010 at 12:45 am

    I have to tell you, I agonize over the head notes. More than the recipes. But maybe because I'm the writer; Bruce, the chef. Still, I feel those headnotes have to say something beyond the ordinary. A real task. Some days, I give up and walk away from the lap top!

  5. Nancy Baggett says

    September 17, 2010 at 1:53 pm

    Appreciate your feedback and compliments a great deal. I'd never really analyzed the importance of descriptors in my own writing until heard a fellow writer suggesting that they detracted from writing. Now I have to say–that all depends on WHICH ones you're using.

  6. Renee Schettler Rossi says

    September 16, 2010 at 10:56 pm

    Lovely post, Nancy.Thanks for going beyond merely pointing out these foibles and actually illustrating not just how to avoid succumbing to them, but how to write better as a result of being aware of them.

  7. Fran Costigan says

    September 16, 2010 at 2:06 am

    Thank you for another informative post– aka food writing class, Nancy.
    I'm printing these and making my Nancy Baggett notebook of musts and do nots. I love this advice in particular: 'I always try to focus on exactly what appeals to me about it–which keeps me from falling into the generic adjective trap.'

  8. Nancy Baggett says

    September 16, 2010 at 1:02 am

    Thanks for your thoughtful comments. And yes, verbs must be carefully chosen, too. When I start to describe a dish, I always try to focus on exactly what appeals to me about it–which keeps me from falling into the generic adjective trap.

  9. Jennie says

    September 16, 2010 at 12:16 am

    Well put! All words — adjectives, adverbs, and verbs alike — are at their most effective when they are specific, descriptive, and evocative. It's difficult as a food writer to avoid the word delicious, but avoid it we must, as it does nothing to distinguish one delicious bite from the next.

  10. Dianne Jacob says

    September 15, 2010 at 10:53 pm

    What a terrific post, Nancy! I do agree that sometimes adjectives can make a difference, but only in the hands of a talented writer, as you suggest. It's much harder to strip away the adjectives and try to write a descriptive headnote anyway.

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